tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post3342946690737587150..comments2023-11-14T22:18:19.759-06:00Comments on A Twist Of Noir: A Twist Of Noir 669 - Kieran SheaChristopher Granthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11581243409967241320noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-18875422227887582332011-03-27T09:57:38.975-05:002011-03-27T09:57:38.975-05:00Nice stuff, Mr. Shea.Nice stuff, Mr. Shea.Jake Hinksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12959106997436699346noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-52380324754681705062011-03-25T15:47:45.742-05:002011-03-25T15:47:45.742-05:00We can always count on you for something innovativ...We can always count on you for something innovative, gripping and brilliant, Kieran. Thanks for this. You make savage so damn smart.M. C. Funkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00088827164403855506noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-50356039674102512472011-03-22T06:30:17.085-05:002011-03-22T06:30:17.085-05:00An entertaining alternative to straight narrative....An entertaining alternative to straight narrative. Nice.Des Nnochirihttp://www.desnnochiri.co.ccnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-26521425960961859202011-03-19T00:18:30.457-05:002011-03-19T00:18:30.457-05:00Horrifying and suspenseful. I dig the newspaper ar...Horrifying and suspenseful. I dig the newspaper article at the end--somehow by pulling the reader out of the action, this actually made it more real.Chris Rhatiganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05769089157184374652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-33295091670142821932011-03-18T00:41:03.554-05:002011-03-18T00:41:03.554-05:00That's kinda the way real things happen someti...That's kinda the way real things happen sometimes. I mean how many -- wake up hungover and between the coffee and the aspirin FLASH SNAPSHOT you think no I didn't but you know it's true -- mornings have we all had? Gritty, real as Speed Graphic photography of a blood on the sidewalk black and white crime scene photos and unstoppable from the jump to the end. Cool.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-16950692230347156772011-03-16T22:34:25.579-05:002011-03-16T22:34:25.579-05:00I love it.
The form and the story.
Cool.
KellyI love it.<br />The form and the story.<br />Cool.<br />Kellysite angelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03128382626007849917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-1700316754365425342011-03-15T17:15:58.683-05:002011-03-15T17:15:58.683-05:00Fantastic dialogue and the news style is perfect t...Fantastic dialogue and the news style is perfect too. You really sucked me in.Katherine Tomlinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696623795926663895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-50484100025794490042011-03-15T15:09:42.646-05:002011-03-15T15:09:42.646-05:00vicious and vivid - apt descriptors - like the set...vicious and vivid - apt descriptors - like the set up and suspense in this one..Michael Solenderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01120045114297450520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-76345839726742471622011-03-15T12:51:48.610-05:002011-03-15T12:51:48.610-05:00The truth is, this actually sort of happened. I c...The truth is, this actually sort of happened. I changed a bunch of the details but it all started when I read the police blotter in the Press....kinda unfolded from there.Kieran Sheahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16681787953865476304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-87074840216702113912011-03-15T10:43:15.126-05:002011-03-15T10:43:15.126-05:00Patti,
The dots did not count towards the word co...Patti,<br /><br />The dots did not count towards the word count.<br /><br />The story behind the stories sometimes will curl your toenails.<br /><br />Suffice it say, Kieran and I tried with the dots counting at one point but they're really not words, are they?<br /><br />Kieran remained ever the professional as I had to chop off some of the words to make it fit at one point.<br /><br />And the finished product is classic Kieran AKA always excellent, in my opinion.Christopher Granthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11581243409967241320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-34852691783397329962011-03-15T10:01:54.198-05:002011-03-15T10:01:54.198-05:00Did the dots count in the word count? Seriously, t...Did the dots count in the word count? Seriously, the usual great work.It gets boring, Kieran. Why don't you write a lousy story sometime? Show us you have off days.pattinase (abbott)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02916037185235335846noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-48144719380989739712011-03-14T20:12:24.780-05:002011-03-14T20:12:24.780-05:00I'm fond of telling a story through dialogue, ...I'm fond of telling a story through dialogue, and this one is a treat.Naomi Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08005429772070247806noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-6612123016634954412011-03-14T19:08:11.784-05:002011-03-14T19:08:11.784-05:00You really pulled the dialogue off super well, and...You really pulled the dialogue off super well, and then to end it with a newspaper article? Such a clever way to share the outcome. Great story.Joycehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03275503653927579472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-43986187491369781612011-03-14T17:04:20.935-05:002011-03-14T17:04:20.935-05:00wow, that was interesting. I was thinking maybe th...wow, that was interesting. I was thinking maybe there was a body inside that sofa. Unique way to end thingsJulia Madeleinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02770857960024041136noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-56791634466095924842011-03-14T16:34:19.423-05:002011-03-14T16:34:19.423-05:00KS, another shot of great dialogue with a very cle...KS, another shot of great dialogue with a very clever ending.Paul D Brazillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12881642426845398389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-9266216704991728022011-03-14T16:06:25.347-05:002011-03-14T16:06:25.347-05:00Fantastic work. Crisp, realistic dialogue and the...Fantastic work. Crisp, realistic dialogue and the breaks helped me see the scene unfolding even better than I think narration would have. Those breaks did wonders for the pacing also. Sometimes less truly is more. Masterful work. No other way to say it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-45393276477518542642011-03-14T16:04:21.928-05:002011-03-14T16:04:21.928-05:00really enjoyed the dialogue here and the news stor...really enjoyed the dialogue here and the news story really works in an almost symmetrical kind of way.Nigel Birdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05529578665251906089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-42902507859506161492011-03-14T16:02:00.471-05:002011-03-14T16:02:00.471-05:00thanks, peoplethanks, peopleKieran Sheahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16681787953865476304noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-32795940049236211092011-03-14T15:55:15.523-05:002011-03-14T15:55:15.523-05:00Ending with the news article is a nice touch. Than...Ending with the news article is a nice touch. Thanks for sharing.Jim Harringtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15467182228068339233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-38237095894588575602011-03-14T13:47:30.341-05:002011-03-14T13:47:30.341-05:00The ending made it all work. I'm always a big ...The ending made it all work. I'm always a big fan of out-of-the-box ways to tell a story. This is excellent.Benjamin Sobieckhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18343962892479384825noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5868832066925549024.post-81889844750621294062011-03-14T13:18:30.985-05:002011-03-14T13:18:30.985-05:00Excellent story (as a Jersey boy, I love the Atlan...Excellent story (as a Jersey boy, I love the Atlantic City connection). Nice dialogue and great flow, and love the way you finished with the newspaper story. Well done!<br />KMKevin Michaelshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00703125974467675009noreply@blogger.com