Wednesday, November 10, 2010

A Twist Of Noir 622 - Sean Patrick Reardon


No blood. And the little Puerto Rican cocksucker needs to be alive, when the concrete vault is dropped on top of him.

I love simple instructions.

The no blood tenet meant my initial idea, a cricket ball, was out. The raised seam would easily lacerate flesh. This bummed me out, because I have really improved the pace on my inswinger. Plan B, a lacrosse ball, works perfectly. Delivered at ninety miles per hour, it will hurt like hell, bruise internal organs, break ribs...crush testicles.

I’m sure Armando, street name Striker, follows a code of stereotypical ethics on the streets of Lawrence, Massachusetts. The usual bullshit: no ratting, never go against, or leave the gang. Striker will now learn ours.

Never fuck with the elderly, children...or the Irish.

My well practiced brogue is sweeter than Tim Finnegan’s when I ask him, “Where is she, you piece of shite?”

“Fuck you,” Esse says.

Distance: fifty-feet. Coordinates: left rib cage. Clear for crank shot.

David Lee Roth pops into my head...‘One break...comin’ up.’



Striker gives up a cough scream. I realize I must have nicked a lung. Coach would be proud.

Striker screams, but sees nothing. He’s got a severe case of Super Glue conjunctivitis at the moment. He’s naked and facing me, but his uncircumcised welfare check missile is a huge distraction.

I’m weird about shit like that.

He’s probably never seen a lacrosse net. Doesn’t know his hands and feet are duct taped to each of the four corners, spread eagle style.

This is the tenderizing of Striker stage of the game. I’m hoping the fear of the money shot is weighing heavily on his mind.

It’s not a fear of heights. It’s the fear of falling.

The Clancy Brothers are doing ‘Wild Colonial Boy’ on the boom box I set up and it sounds great reverberating off the cement walls of warehouse. Senor Shitforbrains thinks he’s being tortured by some crazy fucking Mick, not the long haired, hippy freak I used to be.


I drop his body, which I duct taped in a coffin chic pose, into the trunk of the Charger. He’s breathing, but in bad shape, covered in welts and bruises that look like red bulls-eyes, with black centers. If he was going to live another day, they would each expand to the size of purple softballs.

I call Tommy, tell him where his daughter is and that I’m on my way. He tells me everything is cool, proceed as planned.

As I drive through the pre-dawn darkness, I’m thinking of the tattoo that runs the length of Striker’s right forearm. It’s an upside down cross, DAD, near the wrist, REST IN PIECES just below the elbow joint. Everyone has their anchor to drag. I have a small dick, at least he had the option of a seeing a shrink.

When I pull up to the cemetery gates, Tommy’s connection is waiting in the backhoe. He climbs down, opens the gates, and walks over to me. I hand him an envelope with five large in it, and pop the trunk with the key fob. We carry Striker’s half dead carcass over to the backhoe and roll him into the front loader. We shake hands and he climbs up into the cockpit.

As I walk away, the engine fires up and I see the front loader start to roll up and then raise into the air. On the drive back to my place, I’m thinking of the mourners, who won’t know they are getting a two-for-one special later this morning as their beloved’s casket is lowered into the vault. If there is an afterlife, I’m hoping Striker gets to sort things out with his old man.

BIO: Sean Patrick Reardon lives in Massachusetts and is the author of the crime thriller Mindjacker. His stories have appeared in Thrillers, Killers -n- Chillers. He’s blogging at Mindjacker.


Paul D Brazill said...

Great stuff. 'his uncircumcised welfare check missile'. Beaut!

Alan Griffiths said...

Now that’s what I call great hand-eye co-ordination!

Super story, Sean and a great last line.

AJ Hayes said...

That's one nice piece of darkness in business mode. Nothing personal, nice and simple, you understand . . . yeah it is but, underneath, no it isn't. "Super Glue conjunctivitis" and "I have a small dick, at least he had the option of a seeing a shrink." are priceless observations of the human condition. Cool.

Chad Eagleton said...

I really dug that one.

Nigel Bird said...


Joyce said...

Great story and perfectly written. Nice and dark and with an icy cold narration. Flawless.

Chris Rhatigan said...

Well done. A portrait of a brutal, fucked up world.

Sean Patrick Reardon said...

Everyone- Thanks so much for reading my story and taking the time to comment. It is a surreal feeling to be included with such a talented group of writers.

Chris- Thanks you for the opportunity!

Rob Kitchin said...

Good stuff. Enjoyed. Give the man a hurley and he'd have a full arsenal

Lee Hughes said...

That was great, especially love.

Never fuck with the elderly, children...or the Irish.

Not wrong there. Remember a feller saying about one Irish bloke, "Great feller, but when he left the room, you went with him just in case." lol

Anonymous said...

Crazy good.
Love the welfare missile and conjunctivitis lines. Way to turn a phrase.

Sean Patrick Reardon said...

Kelly, Lee, Rob- Thanks for the read and comments.

David Barber said...

Sean, still catching up with stuff. Glad I did on this one. Loved it.

Melissa Sugar said...

Well written. This was dark and chilly; I loved it. I really like the uncircumcised welfare check missile. Great story, Sean

Peter Rozovsky said...

Cricket. Lacrosse. I see you follow the old advice to write what you know.

I applaud your effort to encourage young readers to take up sports.
Detectives Beyond Borders
"Because Murder Is More Fun Away From Home"

Sean Patrick Reardon said...

Sugar & Pete- I sincererly thank you for the read and the comments. It means a lot!